Having a section of Optiverse just for people to post their landing pages for critique would be a useful feature for a lot of people. It would be a nice place to take a break from our normal CRO workload while still somewhat "staying on task" during the work day.
1) "Don't stress. We're just around the corner".
The headline is too casual. Use this section to create a strong call to action while also creating a sense of urgency. Example Headline: Get water damage fixed fast before it becomes worse AND more expensive to mediate. Sub headline: One phone call and experts will be on their way to assess the problem and provide you with a free estimate."
2) Contact Form
Most contact forms for lead gen sites appear on the right side of the page and I would be surprised if the form on the left converts better than having it on the right. Change get a free quote to "Get A Free Onsite Analysis"
3) Credibility logos
I'm not sure what these mean and why they help set your company apart. Place a label above them that lets users know why they add credibility.
4) 2nd bullet point - "or $$$ back"
This should be spelled out.
I changed whatever I could change. I'll have to get my designer to change the form to the right. Like you, I prefer the right side better but I wanted to experiment with the left.
Why do you think the $$$ should go? I thought it grabs more attention.